black star of darkness

Wow, this is a very powerful and emotive poem, some constructive points to improve on though : Two-page ads blare the name— not hers; her face is her name, her ...

Wow I really like the outpouring of emotion here, I think that it is what the poem's all about so I won't judge you on grammar or your writing, I ...

I mean obviously you have written this a while ago, so the flow and other parts of the poem are not amazing but I like the imagery and the repetition ...

Hey, I really love the whole symmetry and feel of this poem, the way it has pace, not too fast, I disagree I do not feel exhausted, I just feel ...

Wow, I was blown away by the emotion in this poem! When the air stops being so generous, Stealing my breaths like you once had done, Just please give me ...

I really like the style of your poem, because it is different, and I like the content matter especially the repetition of the " I'm Sorry' and the comparisons that ...

Darren Shan definitely, I loved the books, but then the film, was just awful, not just as a a film, but as a representation of the first three books, introducing ...

I like how this is going, it is quite a gripping story, but I must agree with the above post, your grammar really does need working on, plus at times ...

A world so wonderful, People so lively, Cities so alive, And nature so fertile. I like this first stanza, very nice imagery - Yet one man, Can’t feel a thing, ...

I like this, it is a very powerful poem, with a good use of repetition. However, I think it could have done with some more work on the rhythm, as ...

I liked this and i could see what you were getting at, but a number of things were in it that failed to draw me, the reader, in: a) Take ...

Sorry I accidentally posted the last one before I had finished, I think that you should work on the shape of your fututre poems whilst retaining the same emotional qualities ...

I like this as you can feel the emotion really well- however this just seems to be a random poem with no many ideas expanded upon. If you expanded upon ...

I like this although I am not too sure why. I think it is the repition that does it for me personally, plus the way you have used your words ...

Yeah I agree you have no idea over anything regarding his parents etc. And Horowitz wants a too-nice ending for Alex so the story involves more and more dramatic escapes, ...